SCP Foundation

The plot is strong with this one. I appreciate the extensive cross-referencing. One may argue that it is too extensive, but that would be a completely subjective point of view and should be disregarded.

Addendum 6666.2: PARAGON Leadership Meeting Transcript I

You have already repeatedly proved your ability to write this kind of documents, so… what is it there for? Information contained there is considerably and unnecessarily watered down and would look much nicer in a form of a summary, like it should be in a proper document of such type.

Depiction of an ancient warrior.

You may want to consider using more informative captions. Imagine SCP-015's photo stating just "Pipes" instead of "Interior View of SCP-015". Again, this is a formal, administrative/scientific document.

Photos of Shannon Lancaster and Coryn Malthus look completely out of place in this SCP entry. Same goes, to a somewhat lesser extent, to the photos of 073 and 343. I understand your desire to increase immersion with illustrations, but it only works if illustrations are justifiable in the context of the narrative, like that of the SCP-6666-A.

[CLASSIFIED DATA EXPUNGED. SEE ADDENDUM 6666.13 FOR MORE INFORMATION]
Addendum 6666.13: REDACTED
The following file is Level 5/6666 Classified.

This document is already of the 5th clearance level. One does not simply classify information from the O5. And even if we go with that novelty of the Ethics Committee having the 5th clearance level, even the ACS you use here states that 6th clearance level exists for the purpose of excluding them. "Level 5/6666" is not the best way to go.

Addendum 6666.7: PARAGON Leadership Meeting Transcript II

Same nattering notice as for the Meeting Transcript I.

Addendum 6666.10: SCP-343 Interview

Cain's cooperation is explainable by his renown good nature. God's sudden blabbering, on the other hand, looks completely unrealistic. Such behavior fits neither gods nor ancient tricksters and looks very strained.

Applied Task Force Hēt-1 "Lance of Longinus"
Support Team: Mobile Task Force Hēt-1 "Lance of Longinus"

So, are they mobile or applied?

Oh, there was one more thing I wanted to tell you before I go.

I understand that you are trying to convey the usual informal/personal O5 chatter, but this is a phrase that can hardly be used in a letter. Of course, theoretically it is possible — but it is not the most… obvious choice of words for a written document. Just a thing for your consideration.

Overall verdict: a nice article, but too long for its own good.